Correct a weak response to this AQA English Language objective: AO5: plan descriptive writing that responds directly to a written or visual stimulus.

: plan descriptive writing that response: A weak response usually summarises, guesses, or names a method without effect. Improve it by choosing evidence, explaining the effect, and linking the point to audience, purpose or writer purpose method. For Descriptive writing, keep one clear focus, select brief evidence or a planned example, explain the method or writing choice, and link the point to effect, audience, purpose, form or tone where relevant.

This is effective because it makes the mistake correction, evidence, explanation and assessment objective visible. Replace summary with a precise point, brief evidence, method, effect and writer purpose so the correction is exam-ready. Descriptive writing should plan audience, purpose, form, tone, viewpoint, content and structure before drafting. Descriptive writing should use a formal presentation, speak to the audience, listen and respond to each question or feedback, and use accurate Standard English register.